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Unwind Ch68: Lev

2013-05-23T16:13:00.000-04:00

Alright, let's hear from the kid who failed to blow himself up.
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Unwind Ch66-67: Connor, Risa

2013-05-22T16:13:00.000-04:00

Part Seven
Consciousness

I think I said earlier that there were eight parts, but apparently it's just seven. So almost done!

"A human being is part of a whole, called by us the Universe, a part limited in time and space. He experiences himself, his thoughts and feelings, as something separated from the rest—a kind of optical delusion of his consciousness. This delusion is a kind of prison for us . . . Our task must be to free ourselves from this prison by widening our circles of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature in its beauty."
—ALBERT EINSTEIN
"Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe."
—ALBERT EINSTEIN

This perfectly encapsulates all the quotes of this book. There's no coherent tone. Sometimes it's pretentious stuff, sometimes it's a joke. And here at the end, it's also riding the coattails of other, cleverer people.

Anyway, we're all really here to find out if Connor-sue made it through with real injuries.

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Unwind Ch64-65: Connor, Clappers

2013-05-21T16:13:00.000-04:00

So now Connor's going through the same oh god how can the person I thought was safe be not safe thing Lev did, but because he's a sucky protagonist he just thinks this instead of doing anything.

And then the guards come to get him.

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Unwind Ch59-63: Roland, Harvest, Roland, Lev

2013-05-20T16:13:00.000-04:00

Time for Roland to die.

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Sunday Carapaces Part 49 (4 reviews, 5 stories)

2013-05-19T23:55:00.000-04:00

April 28-30

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AOOOOOOO Replies, Part 2

2013-05-19T12:00:00.000-04:00

We continue our adventures into the past.
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Ib

2013-05-18T16:13:00.000-04:00

Ib is a really cool game and you should go download it immediately!

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Unwind Ch56-58: Connor, Lev, Connor

2013-05-17T16:13:00.000-04:00

Connor tells us they're in thirty-kid dormitories and that before dinner he sees two beds have been stripped, and no one mentions it.

Conner can't remember either the names or the faces of the missing kids, and that haunts him.

Connor has never given a solitary fuck.
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Unwind Ch52-55: Risa, Connor, Lev, Risa

2013-05-16T16:13:00.000-04:00

Risa's chapter jumps back and forth between more cheery evil stupid adult chatter and her talking about the place. Mostly, it's about how special Connor is. She's advised not to stay friends with the so-called Akron AWOL because surely the more we tell kids he's a big deal the less they'll think he's a big deal, and she goes on about how upset she was about what happened to him.

Physically, he was not harmed in any way. It would not do to damage the merchandise. Psychologically, however, that's a different story. They paraded him through the grounds for nearly twenty minutes. Then they took off his shackles and just left him there by the flagpole. No trip to the "welcome center," no orientation, nothing.

Oh no, no welcome center!

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"We Are Young" by Fun.

2013-05-16T16:08:00.001-04:00

"I hate this band," I said to Large Younger Brother as we were sitting in between periods at a Ranger game. "Their other song was complete plagiarism, it pisses me off."

He snorted. "Yeah? I hate them because this song is about beating your girlfriend and how awesome it is."

"What?!"

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Unwind Ch49-51 Roland, Connor, Camp

2013-05-15T16:13:00.000-04:00

And now let's find out what Roland's actually doing.
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Unwind Ch46-48: Connor, First-Year Residents, Risa

2013-05-14T16:13:00.000-04:00

Back to Connor again.

Roland is slowly breaking. He confesses to many things, petty acts of vandalism and theft, that Connor couldn't care less about.

I am really ambivalent about this.

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Unwind Ch40-45: Connor, Mob, Risa, Mob, Connor, Mob

2013-05-13T16:13:00.000-04:00

"I'm here," Roland calls from outside the FedEx jet. "What do you want?"
Connor remains hidden inside the hold. He knows he's only going to get one chance at this, so he's got to do it right. "Come inside, and we'll talk about it."
"No, you come out."
Nice try, Connor thinks, but this is going to be on my terms.

In fiction, this is the role a villain plays.

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Sunday Carapaces Part 48 (8)

2013-05-12T23:56:00.000-04:00

April 24-28
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AOOOOOOO Replies, Part 1

2013-05-12T22:00:00.000-04:00

So, AOOOOOOOO responses have gotten rather entertaining. As is customary, I'll be posting the good as well as the bad so the reasonable get their accolades, which in this case, means we start quite well and slowly descend into something indistinguishable from FFN. We begin years back in the early days of fandom, when people were saner and, perhaps coincidentally, also better writers overall. Go check them out!
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Dandelion Recipes

2013-05-11T12:33:00.000-04:00

Let's expand the definition of recs until it snaps in half.

Since I love to see dandelions and other people don't, I've been trying to cook a bit with them. I was just feeding them to the chickens and lizard, but there's only so much they can eat.

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Unwind Ch37-39: Emby and the Admiral, Mob, Roland

2013-05-10T16:13:00.000-04:00

Yup, the viewpoint character for Ch37 is seriously "Emby and the Admiral". Book, you have a simple format and you can't even stick to it? It's not like you've been shy in past chapters to just have a tiny couple-paragraph extra chapter for a different viewpoint character when you want to add something that wasn't covered.
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Unwind Ch35-36: Lev, Risa

2013-05-09T16:13:00.000-04:00

Where Lev was between the time he left CyFi and his arrival at the Graveyard is less important than where his thoughts resided. They resided in places colder and darker than the many places he hid.
He had survived the month through a string of unpleasant compromises and crimes of convenience—whatever was necessary to keep himself alive.

So yeah, the idea the novella could explain his behavior is a retcon, as is the very idea he stumbled onto a "chancefolk" reservation.
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Unwind Anatomy

2013-05-08T16:13:00.000-04:00

So, we're reached the halfway point by chapter count. Quite a bit farther by page count. And I really can't stand another chapter of this at the moment, so break time.

Often these involve going over how to fix things and still keep the general plotline, but instead let's go over how there are plenty of good stories you can tell with these elements and the author didn't because he's a bad person who prefers writing propaganda for kids.

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Unwind Ch34: Connor Part 2

2013-05-07T16:13:00.000-04:00

Continuing our adventures in Connor is a terrible person and also a sue the book insists we should love, Connor's invited into the admiral's quarters to fix something because sue.
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Unwind Ch34: Connor Part 1

2013-05-06T16:13:00.000-04:00

This chapter just goes on. And on. And fucking on. The author thinks Connor is the hottest shit in the desert so why wouldn't you want thousands of words about him?
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Sunday Carapaces Part 47 (5 reviews, 8 stories)

2013-05-05T23:55:00.000-04:00

4/18-24

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The Spirit Engine II - Guest review

2013-05-04T14:54:00.000-04:00

The Spirit Engine II is an interesting game. The title itself is a bit of a misnomer. It actually has nothing at all to do with the original Spirit Engine game – I guess the developer couldn't think of any new title, so he just used the name brand of his previous game, a la Final Fantasy? I haven't played the original game, though, so I have no idea how it compares and will only be discussing this one.

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Unwind Ch33: Risa

2013-05-03T16:13:00.000-04:00

Now it's Risa's turn to illustrate what I said last chapter about this setup really not seeming like it's the best way to minimize friction.

Her residency begins with an exercise in humility.

Also I will bet right now that this is not how Connor's chapter goes.
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Unwind Ch32: The Admiral

2013-05-02T16:13:00.000-04:00

Part Five
Graveyard

Part five already! And yet going by chapters we're not yet halfway done.

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