So I actually had to do a fair amount of editing on that little paragraph. I think I am going to have to speak very slowly into this thing. Also Dragon puts ads along the bottom when you’re recording and processing what you’re recording. You occasionally see little ads about Dragon Naturally Speaking.

Okay so I keep forgetting to say my punctuation. That is going to take some getting used to. I think for a novelist, this is going to be awfully cumbersome. But maybe for writing blog posts it won’t be so bad. And maybe I’ll get used to it.

So now I’m going to mail this to my e-mail address and put it in a blog post. Let me know what you think. Does it sound like me?

Dang I forgot my punctuation again.

(Naturally, I fixed all of my editing problems before I posted this.)

Sorry about Monday’s post. I read all your comments, and thank you. I have just a little upheaval going on right now. Yanno, the whole “life intrudes” kind of thing. I’ll try not to let my blog go entirely dark, though. It may just be a bit more informal than usual.

Still reading. Lately, I’ve been reading Alison Goodman’s Eona, but since I occasionally find the plot frustrating, I am currently taking a break from it to read Jennifer Estep’s Venom.

Read any good books lately?

Emily Casey is a writer from Tallahassee, Florida who chases two crazy kids around the house all day before collapsing in front of her computer. She writes everything from fairy tales to zombies, whatever's exciting to her, and just hopes someone else out there likes it. Her debut novel The Fairy Tale Trap is a young adult fantasy about a snarky teen trapped in the tale Beauty and the Beast.

This post is part of Emily's blog tour. The next stop in the blog tour is at Expected Abberations.

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A beautiful girl is hated by her mother. A prince is cursed with an ugly appearance. A poor boy takes a risk to seek his fortune. A princess waits for true love.

We all love the magic in fairy tales. There’s something about the perfectly white skin and red lips of a princess, the single rose that brings fortune in disguise, and the deal-with-the-devil motif that makes us hungry for more.

But is it the magic that makes fairy tales magical? Look at the first paragraph. Each sentence describes a fairy tale, but couldn’t you tell each of those stories without magic?

Take a look at Tia’s book, The Sevenfold Spell. Yes, there’s enchantment and fairies, but really this story is about a girl whose prospects of marriage have been taken away by those in power. My book, The Fairy Tale Trap, has an enchanted forest, pixies, and spells that give my heroine some nasty surprises. But it’s really about a teenager that is taken from her home and is fighting to get back.

Now, I personally love to play in magical worlds. I’ve loved fairy tales ever since I could sit on my granddaddy’s lap long enough to hear “the end”. To me, the fantasy part of a story is like the chocolate in a chocolate cake. The cake is a vessel that carries the bitter cocoa and turns it into something moist and sweet. Can you have a cake without it? Sure. But it’s not chocolate. I typically roll my eyes at yellow cake and say, “Now, WHY would you make a cake without chocolate?” (But hey, some people like it that way. Weird.)

But you wouldn’t eat plain cocoa powder, either. Just like you can’t have fantasy without a good story to carry it. When I talk to a friend about a great book, I usually give the cocoa part of the story. “It’s about a girl that gets trapped in the story Beauty and the Beast. There are all these weird spells that she has to break and an enchanted forest she has to get through.” But as I’m describing it, I know that I’m leaving something out. I know I’m not doing the book justice. So I usually just end with, “Well, it’s really good. You have to read it.”

And I think the part I can’t describe is what makes the story worthwhile. The cake part. Sure, we’re chocolate people on this blog, but some readers like pineapple upside-down cake and others like angel food.

But the part that makes a book “a favorite” is the people in it. It’s a character that struggles with something we can relate to. Those are the magical books.

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The Fairy Tale Trap is a YA fantasy about a sarcastic/spunky teen who gets trapped in Beauty and the Beast. The book trailer can be found here. And here are some sample chapters.

What makes a book magical for you?

Frustrating Plotlines

Sometimes, it seems like the plot is too frustrating. I read for entertainment. I don’t need frustrating plotlines to elevate my already-high blood pressure. I especially hate it when I figure something out, but the author refuses to let the character figure the same thing out. I am now reading a book where the character has come to a conclusion that I just know is wrong. But the character is convinced she is right. I just know she is going to spend the next four hundred pages clinging to her mistaken conclusion only to figure out she was wrong at the last minute, and then save the day. How do I know this? Because that’s what happened in Book One. Retread. I’m not sure if I want to finish the book and see if I am wrong.

Amoral Characters

I finished reading The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo and I started reading the second book, but I set it aside. Why? Because I’m having trouble feeling any empathy for the main character. She is totally amoral and is now sleeping with a sixteen year old boy. Romance publishers would never dare go near such a plotline. The only thing that seems to fire up her sense of right and wrong is brutality toward woman. Which, of course, she experiences for herself. Which brings me to another set-aside reason …

Excess Brutality

The first book in the Millennium Trilogy almost got set aside because of the sexual brutality. I’m only a few chapters into the second book, and already I can foresee the author upping the brutality for book 2. I’m just not sure I want to suffer through it.

Monologues

I recently rated a book a 3 on Goodreads instead of a 4 because in the end, the character didn’t figure it out. Instead, the reader had to be served up the explanations of the plot in the form of villain monologues. The really good writers always have their characters figure out the mystery, thus avoiding this trap. Monologues rarely cause me to actually set aside the book, because hey–I’m almost at the ending anyway. But still. Grr.

Authorial Over-Indulgence

Sometimes, when the author becomes more and more successful, they over-indulge. Their stories become longer, but not with added substance–with added fluff. Tension is still important even if you are a successful author. Every scene must still count. You can’t drag things out–neither the tension of the story’s climatic resolution, nor the plot itself over book after book after book. Are these authors in love with their own words? I think nothing of abandoning a series at book 5 and toting the entire set to the used book store once the plot starts flatlining. Conversely, after reading an entertaining trilogy, I’ll always check out the author’s next series. So really, there’s nothing to be afraid of in actually, yanno, getting to the end.

In order to end on a more positive note, I promise to do a companion post on “Five Reasons I Keep Turning the Pages”. In the meantime, please share some of the reasons you have set some recent reads aside.

To start, empty your pockets and coin purses and throw them on a desk.

Pennies

You will notice you have two types of pennies. Nice, dark, coppery looking ones with a uniform color, and crummy, old-looking ones that are blotchy, pitted and icky. The old-looking, crummy ones are actually the newer coins. Toss them aside. They are no longer even made of copper anymore, which is why they look so yucky. I don’t even like handling them.

Of the nice coppery ones, turn them to the reverse. The wheat-back coins are definite keepers. The rest are a toss-up. With each year, as more and more copper coins are taken out of circulation, these coins are going be worth more and more. If you stumble across a penny that you have mistaken for a dime because it is silvery, definitely keep it. It is probably a steel penny that was manufactured during WWII.

In 2009, the Lincoln Penny took on a whole new meaning when four coins were minted with various likenesses of Lincoln. Marring this event was the crappy composition of the coin. If you can find some nice ones, be sure to preserve them in plastic.

Sample coins – click to enlarge

Nickels

During 2004 and 2005, a series of special coins were made you might want to collect yourself a set. They aren’t worth anything, but it is a good practice to keep a sample of any special edition coin.

Other than that, nickels aren’t very special. They’re made of … well, nickel, and aren’t very exciting.

Dimes

You might find a dime that is more silvery looking than the others. Check it out. If it is 1964 or earlier, immediately set it aside. It is 90% silver. Nowadays, they are actually copper coated in nickel. You will notice that real silver coins make a silvery ping when you bounce them on a table, or when they jingle with other coins. If you ever hear anything unusual in your change, scrutinize every coin.

If you find a dime with a woman on the front, not only should you set it aside, you should seal it in plastic. Liberty dimes were last minted during WWII.

Of additional interest are unclad dimes. These are dimes that look like pennies because they never got their nickel coating. Most of these have been stripped artificially, but if they are all coppery with no suspicious ring of silver around the ribbed edge of the dime, it may be an actual unclad dime.

Quarters

Quarters were also mostly silver before 1965. So check out any old quarter. The recent state quarters aren’t worth very much, but it might be worth the trouble to collect yourself a set.

Starting this year, another multiyear set is being issued, the America the Beautiful Quarters program. These quarters feature national parks. Coin sets for 2011 are still available at the Mint.

Of interest are bicentennial quarters. These were minted in 1976, and they have a drummer on the reverse. They are starting to get pretty special to find in your change. I immediately take any I find out of circulation and encase it in plastic.

Other coins

Going to the post office and using cash in the the stamp machine can yield you some dollar coins. The post office is the only place that regularly uses dollar coins. I don’t have any of the recent ones, only some older Sacajawea coins. The two current dollar coins are the presidential coin, and the Sacajawea coin. I also grab the Susan B. Anthony coins, but I think they have all been removed from circulation. During its last mint year, I got one encased in mylar from the Mint. They may be almost impossible to find nowadays.

Same goes for half-dollars. I have one of particular interest–a bicentennial half-dollar coin. It looks almost new, too. I’ve had it since Junior High. Other than that year, this coin has not changed in recent years, like other coins have. Also be on the lookout for pre-1965 silver half-dollars.

I have hundreds of coins, mostly because I grab anything that’s unusual to me, even current foreign coins. Thanks to a friend of my father, I have lots of European coins from WWII, including a french coin made of tin. I really need to grab a set of Euro coins, but they’re kind of expensive.

So, go empty those pockets and change purses. Find anything cool?

But I do have several books to review and several authors have been in touch about guest reviews, so things should heat up in January. That is a good time for beginnings, I think. Or re-begins.

See ya then!

An Unseasonable Christmas

Plus, the Here Be Magic authors are also giving away a Kindle Fire! You’ll find the link to the giveaway in the above post. So read, comment, and enjoy!

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Sometimes research leads you to abandon a promising plotline.

I was writing my Beauty and the Beast story and realized that the Beast’s aunt needed to be in the story. So I threw in an older middle-aged woman, and made her slightly cantankerous and bossy but with a heart of gold, and then I realized she was a dreadful stereotype. So I tried to think of a distinctly Irish-type character who was not a stereotype.

That’s when I thought about making her a nun.

Yeah, so among the Irish, having a nun for an aunt is kind of stereotypical. Even I have one. (Well, she was a great aunt.) But not all of us are Irish, are we? And my experience reading in fiction certainly does not include many nuns.

I wish Aunty Peg were still alive, because she would have been a girl during the time I am writing this story. She would remember what it was like. I know what nuns and convents were like when I was a girl; I very much had an Irish upbringing, despite being born in the United States.

I even stayed in a convent for a week when I was 11. We were in the midst of moving during the Christmas, and Sr. Gabriel was one of the only nuns who stayed behind that year during their annual trip back to Ireland. So we stayed with her in the mostly-empty convent. We ran around through the graveyard, played in the choir loft of the adjacent church, peeked into the convent chapel, and drank kettlefuls of tea. You can’t even imagine how fun it was.

This took place in the late 70s, after Vatican II, so the 20th century changes to convent life had already taken place. Reading the Vatican II summaries was interesting, but didn’t have what I needed. Since I didn’t have Aunt Peg, I interviewed my mom to find out if nuns back then were free to move about the community, which I needed in the story. And according to her, they always went about in twos, and were pretty restricted outside the convent. (Although within the convent was another story.)

So it looks like my nun character might not work out. I think I need to dig up some letters or diaries to be certain, or maybe find a nonfiction book. Or maybe I’ll just write her to keep the story going and make any adjustments later. She wouldn’t be the first character I’ve written and thrown away.

Most likely, I’ll morph that character again. She needs to come from a wealthy Irish background. Any ideas?

Anyway, for my B&tB story, I have been researching the medical impacts of invisibility.

(If you ever wondered why certain people become writers, then the above sentence should give you all the answer you need. What other useful thing could I do with this imagination of mine?)

First, some background. In the original version of Beauty and the Beast, all the servants were turned invisible as part of the same curse that turned the Beast into a beast. Now, imagine the servants fifteen years later. Surely, there would have been adverse effects from prolonged invisibility.The biggest, I think, would be problems from lack of sunlight. If the sun passes right through you, then you probably don’t absorb much of it.

The biggest problem, I’ve found so far, would be a vitamin D deficiency. This would pose a terrible problem for children, as they would probably develop rickets, a horrifying condition in which the bones soften and twist. Legs become either severely bowlegged or knock-kneed. Ankles turn in. Spines twist. Elbows misshapen. Rickets can also affect adults as their bones soften and warp under the influence of gravity.

Other problems, I think, would include depression and arthritis. In my research stack is a notation to research cabin fever. I will also be tapping the knowledge of my nurse sister, my niece who is studying nursing, and fellow RWA members in the medical field.

I am also brushing off some old research on the history of blood transfusions. B&tB is turning out to be a sort of medical steampunk story, and once, long ago, when I wrote for the Bathroom Reader series (seriously!), I wrote about blood types. So I know all about the long and tragic history of how we discovered blood types and the complexities of Rh factors. Way back when, a blood transfusion was only for the desperate, because there was always a chance you would get the wrong blood type, and then you die.

The young lady at the left is my Aunt Matilda (or actually, my great, great Aunt Matilda), and she was a nurse during the time period in which I am setting this story. Maybe she had personal knowledge of these risky transfusions. Maybe not. But the picture is cool, anyway.

So imagine, if you will, being invisible for fifteen years. Can you think of any adverse affects that I have not thought of?

First, back in the middle of October, I decided I was finished with the rough story. My first draft actually includes making about 3 passes through the manuscript. I tend to write a very bare-bones first draft, because the story is coming fast and furious, and I just want get it down. My actual first draft was about 15,000 words. When I finished in October, I had added about 10,000 words. It was at that point that I set it aside.

Why set it aside? Back in the spring, I took an online course by Angela James entitled Before You Hit Send (well worth the money). Part of what she stressed was giving your manuscript time to just sit. You cannot effectively edit unless you have a fresh viewpoint. And you get that by giving yourself a break from it, for at least 3 weeks. So I did. I worked on my time travel story, plus I wrote 3500 words of a Beauty and the Beast story. Then, I went back to Snow White, printed it out, wrote all over it, and did another draft or two. I ended up with a draft of about 33000 words, plus a discards file of 5000 words (my smallest ever!)

That was kind of a long preface to the meat of this blog, but over the weekend, I did my manuscript clean-up. Here’s what I do:

1. Remove scene titles. I make heavy use of the Document Map in Word (now called the Navigation Pane), and I name all my scenes so I can just point and click the map to jump to a scene. When I clean my doc, these are deleted.
2. Ensure scene break formatting is consistent. Usually I’ll use a hash (the old-fashioned way), but since I know CP uses *** scene breaks, that’s what I use for stories I intend to submit there first.
3. Ensure chapter break formatting is consistent, and chapter numberings are correct. There is no right way, just pick a way and be consistent.
4. Name chapters. I did this for The Sevenfold Spell, so I needed to do it here. Make sure the chapter names are not spoilery. They should “go with” the beginning of the chapter, not the end.
5. Skim for unnecessary scenes. These are the scenes that don’t drive the plot forward. I found one scene during my final clean-up that had to go, thus swelling my discards file past 5000 words.
6. Skim for pacing. Page through the story by scrolling it with your mouse wheel. If one scene requires notably more srolls than the others, take a closer look. Same goes for short scenes. You might even want to zoom way out on your MS so you can just take in the scene lengths without getting distracted by the words. (Set your zoom to 10% and you’ll see what I mean.)
7. Check chapters endings and beginnings. Do the endings end on a cliffhanger without seeming gimmicky? Do they flow? Do the beginnings progress naturally from the ending, and if not, do you have a good reason for it? I had to change the order of two scenes because I didn’t want to get through the morning, and then go back in time to an earlier point and get through the morning again for my other character.
8. Fuss over the whole thing, backwards and forwards. Review the todo list that is in your mind, and get’em done. Try to think of any last minute tweaks you need. Make sure the tweaks don’t change the story more than you intended.
9. Go into Document Properties and fill out the author, title and any other information you desire, such as the series title.
10. Send to your beta readers. Yes, you have to be prepared to again sit back and wait. Find some good readers–they are hard to find–and send them off, and give them a good long time before you expect anything back. I gave my readers till the middle of January. In the meantime, I get to work on my other stories. Yippie!

Also, while waiting for feedback (an eleventh step!), I read the whole story aloud. This helps more that you would believe. My husband listens to me (and makes suggestions), but even reading by myself clues me in to so many voice problems.

What will I do when I get the feedback back? Another draft, of course! But this one–unless the feedback was “major work is needed”–is the final one before I submit.