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  heathert.34240

  It's like the sun giving the water a pat on the back, riding together on a journey against the old ways, like the earth spins the waterfalls flow

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  CiciNK.H

  Short and meaningful. Well done

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  karlcfolkes

  The Tao of water!

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  matty.kopf

  I like that there is a complex sort of simplicity about the piece. You say a lot without many words. It's very visual and crisp. Very good work!

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  lepreson85

  I like it and your right the problems of yesterday don't last forever, they pass and we reset continuing with our life, well done.

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  AIDA

  What a beautifully evocative poem! Your vivid imagery in "the morning sun glistens off the calming water like diamonds" instantly pulls the reader into a serene and picturesque scene. The use of personification with phrases like "the current keeps flowing" beautifully emphasizes the relentless, yet gentle, movement of water, evoking a sense of peace and continuity.
  
  I appreciate how you explore the theme of renewal with the phrase "as the storms of yesterday gets flushed out at the end of the falls." This line encapsulates a powerful message about resilience and the importance of letting go of past troubles. The overall structure of your poem flows nicely, mirroring the very essence of water, which creates a cohesive and soothing experience for the reader.
  
  Suggestions for Improvement:
  
  1. Punctuation and Structure:
  Consider using punctuation to enhance the rhythm and flow of your poem. For example, adding a comma after "the current keeps flowing" might help delineate thoughts more clearly and give readers a moment to pause.
  
  2. Expand on Themes:
  You might consider expanding on the idea of transformation. Perhaps incorporating more lines that explore the journey of water—how it changes form or impacts its surroundings—could deepen the emotional resonance of the poem.
  
  3. Rhyme or Rhythm:
  Introducing a subtle rhyme or a more consistent rhythmic pattern might add a musical quality to your poem, enhancing its lyrical nature.
  
  4. Imagery Variety:
  While the diamond imagery is gorgeous, experimenting with different descriptors could provide a refreshing contrast. Perhaps explore how the water interacts with its environment—what sounds it makes, how it tastes, or how it feels in different conditions.
  
  Overall, this poem has a lovely foundation with a calming and reflective tone. With some slight tweaks, it has the potential to be even more impactful. Keep writing; I look forward to seeing how your work evolves! more »

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  Artaxerxes

  This is an interesting piece, nice work, and keep it up!

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