Flying Whale Productions

Jesus Christ Superstar as Steampunk - Really

2009-11-09T16:02:17-05:00

Last night I went to see Mercy High Schools' production of Jesus Christ Superstar. The son of one of my friends from Glenwood Gardens had the title role, so a group of us decided to go out to dinner together then see the show.

I've seen my share of HS Drama from all ends of the spectrum, from cringe inducing, to practically professional. JCS is an ambitious show for a HS to stage. The music isn't easy and since it is more Opera than Musical it's a lot of singing your young actors to carry off. It is also an odd show for an all girls HS since the leads are male. But the drama director at Mercy is known for pushing that sort of boundary and changing sex of characters to give the young women in her program the chance to do challenging meaty parts.

The thing that really intrigued me when I heard about the show wasn't that some of the male roles were going to be played by women, it was that the show was going to be done in a Steampunk setting. Since I'm a big Steampunk fan this was a real hook for me.

I was impressed.

The minimal dark pipe, gear, and boiler plate set worked. The amime-esque black, silver and gray costumed apostles were funky, half punk-rock half steampunk, the Romans in their bright red Eisenhower Jackets looked vaguely like the evil aliens for the original 1980's V miniseries and the mostly female chorus as the proletariat in work boots, rolled up sleeves and cloth caps looked like an army of Rosie the Riveters.

The show had some of the same issues that plague most HS Musicals, but it was very well done especially considering Mercy is not a Drama magnet school. All the main characters were on top of the material. I've seen college and community theater productions where the actors didn't have the stage presents of the young men who played Jesus and Judas in this production. The guy who did Caiaphas and the young woman who did Annas were also standouts. Herod as an flamboyant Elton John style celeb was brilliant.

On the downside the chorus was so big that they were sometimes almost tripping over each other in the big production numbers. I know this is common in HS theater because they want to give as many kids as possible parts in the production. My problem was that it was hard to understand what they were singing. They needed to work on projection or they needed to be miked better. Someone should have told the dance chorus that smiling like you were in the baton twirling talent segment of the Miss the America pageant was not the right emotion for any part of this musical. They had the moves but not the emotional impact they should have had. I see that as a direction not production issue.

All things considered this was a great production, and I'm sorry I didn't see it until the last night because I would have like to have talked it up to people. Not that I think they needed PR. I think they had sell out houses for the whole run.

NaNo WriMo - Update 2

2009-11-03T18:16:17-05:00

Up to 2070 words.

Have some sort gut bug I think. Woke up at the crack of dawn to go vote and felt wretched. Came home from voting and slept most of the morning. Didn't get much writing done. I hope I feel better tomorrow.

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NaNo WriMo - Update

2009-11-02T23:18:00-05:00

Only 48,737 words left to go

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National Novel Writing Month

2009-11-01T17:02:46-05:00

Yikes!!!

Since my position as a Naturalist at Glenwood Gardens ended as of 10/31 and since I have not been sucessful at finding another job I've signed up to do NaNo WriMo. I'm going to try and write a 50,000 word novel between now and November 30th.

I'm planning on revising and expanding a short story I did a while back. If everything comes together I'll have a Steampunk version of Cinderella with a twist.

Like I said Yikes!!!

Soulless - Gail Carriger

2009-10-22T15:35:28-04:00

Alexia Tarabotti has several strikes against her as far as society is concerned. She’s a spinster-at the dried-up age of 25, she’s a hopeless bluestocking, and her father, who at least has the good grace to have died when she was an infant, was a scholar of things best not talked about in civilized drawing rooms, and Italian too boot. So it’s not surprising that due to an attack of boredom, and the poor quality of food on the buffet, at the Duchess of Snodgrove’s Ball Alexia takes herself off the the Library and orders the servants to bring her tea . Just as she is settling in to exploring the Duke’s under appreciated library a vampire rushes into the room and tries to bight her neck – without a proper introduction! Well, Alexia my be unconventional but she won’t stand for things like that. Unfortunately for the vampire in question, who is shabbily dressed in last season’s style of evening wear, Alexia has inherited more than her unfashionable tan skin, robust figure, and strong nose from her father - Like him she is soulless.

In this enlighten period of the triumph of science this isn’t a religious statement, but a description of her physiology. It seems intelligent creatures are divided into three groups. The vast majority of people are Naturals, with just enough soul to go through a normal life. Some people have an excess of soul, they are Supernatural. If they die under the right circumstances they become Vampires, Werewolves or Ghosts. A few people are Preternatural, they have no or very little soul. Contact with them negates the advantages extra soul gives Supernaturals. Vampires, Werewolves and Ghosts are all productive members of society. There is not of the preying on innocent Naturals that went on in the past. Supernaturals are licensed and policed by the Bureau of Unnatural Registry Alexia unintentional kills her vampire attacker with her trusty parasol. This complication brings Lord Maccon, head of the BUR, chief werewolf in London and close adviser or Queen Victoria on Supernatural matters, into the picture. He and Alexia have been something between friends and enemies ever since the infamous hedgehog incident at a house-party the year before. He’s large, loud, handsome, and almost civilized, for a Scott. Reluctantly he accepts Alexia’s help trying to find out what Vampire Hive is letting its fledglings our so poorly dressed and lacking in manners. They discover a trail of missing lone wolfs and solitary vampires that is quite perplexing. Then the plot thickens… The best comparison I can think of for this novel is Amelia Peabody meats Buffy. But that does not do it justice. It is charming, engaging , has HEA, and best of all is the planned first book in a series of adventures featuring Alexia and Lord Maccon.
There is a little violence, and some sex, but nothing that is beyond very mild.

Rough Draft The Official Propaganda Organ of the Cincinnati Writers Project Autumn 2009

2009-09-28T22:42:15-04:00

Rough Draft

The Official Propaganda Organ of the Cincinnati Writers Project

Autumn 2009

Plain Words

“... Dogs,” she added, in explanatory aside, “are habit, I think.”

This line from the short story, Aunt Tatty, by British author Elizabeth Bowen, aptly describes the portion of my life that runs like a backdrop, keeps me normal. When I don’t understand what humans are trying to tell me, I look to the pack to put it in simpler terms.

Our alpha male, Hunter, is ancient, creaky with arthritis, mostly blind and just plain old tired. As we watch him take the last tentative steps toward that big rabbit hunt in the sky, I can’t help but wonder what he makes of the whole thing. Sometimes he stands, his nose almost touching the wall, waiting. Mostly I think he’s confused and angry because his body will no longer do what he asks of it.

Boy, does that sound like home.

I was thinking that death is probably like autumn then--a splash of color, the last dramatic sigh before the leaves fall off. Eventually, we all become humus for next year’s mulch because, as the title of our earlier anthology pointed out, Somebody’s Gotta Die before the cycle begins anew.

So we wait for Hunt’s leaves to drop and, waiting, we enjoy the color, what there is left of it.

Marcia Eckstein, Editor-at-Home

meckstein@lys.org

Dying is an art, like everything else.

Sylvia Plath

2009 Membership Party in November

This year’s membership party is tentatively scheduled for the first Saturday in November at Joseph-Beth Booksellers in Rookwood Plaza, Norwood. See Mary’s article below.

Presidential Ramblings

Mary Fitzpatrick

It is that time of year again. CWP dues are due. Paying dues is not mandatory, but your dues are the source of the seed money we use to publish our anthologies. If being a CWP member has helped you become a better writer, or if it has just kept you out of trouble on critique group nights, please help support the group by paying your $25.00 either at the Member’s party or by sending a check to the CWP PO Box. (CWP, PO Box 29367, Cincinnati, OH 45229.)

It is also time for CWP elections. As things stand we have two elected offices, president and treasurer. Rough Draft Editor, and Web-guru are appointed offices. I’m willing to stay on as President for one more year. Although she and her husband may be moving back to India sometime next year because of his job, Saloni is willing to stay on as Treasure until or unless that happens. As of the time I’m writing this, no one has come forward to run for either office. If you are interested please let a member of the CWP board know.

Both the voting for the CWP board members and paying of dues usually happens in October at the annual CWP member’s party. This year’s member’s party is tentatively scheduled for the first Saturday in November, which gives you a little more time to think about both. I had really wanted to have the details on this year’s party worked out in time for the Fall Rough Draft, but I’m still negotiating with the good folks at Jo-Beth. Keep your eyes peeled for specific member’s party details in the near future.

And one last thing, we have around thirty unsold copies of our Anthology, Not From Around Here, Are You? . Right now they are camping out next to my writing desk in my dining room, all looking for permanent homes. I’d like to try and set up some reading events over the winter where we could get positive exposure for our group and sell some of the anthologies. If you know of a good venue for a book reading and/or if you are willing to help organize one, please let me know. Also, remember the gift giving season is not that far away and CWP anthologies make great stocking stuffers.

Suddenly I realize

That if I step out of my body I would break

Into blossom

A Blessing, James Wright

Prologue Pros and Cons

Op-ed by Tom Groh

Novice writers, of which I am one, sometimes come to rely too heavily on literary devices. We tend to fall back on clever word play and other syntactical gimmickry in lieu of fully realized characters, a well-developed plot and theme. While prologues don’t fall exactly into the gimmickry category, it’s too easy for them to lean in that direction.

We’ve seen a lot of prologues come through the Wednesday night critique group lately, and though I am not an expert (that’s what Op-ed means) I thought I’d weigh in on the topic.

A prologue is introductory material set apart in time, space or viewpoint from the main part of the story which nuances and creates intrigue for the story to come. The good stuff of the prologue should exist outside the framework of the main story at the same time providing essential details, information and insight into the main story that cannot be shown in a better way.

A good prologue, while linked to the main story, can stand alone. It is filled with drama and tension all its own. Most of all, it entertains while casting an illuminating light on some aspect of the story to come.

One of the main troubles with prologues I’ve seen is that the writing is often back-story and nothing else. These slow-moving, often backward-moving chunks of narrative don’t launch the drama of the story. If you want folks to keep reading, launch.

I’m not anti-prologue. Honest! In fact, if you still want to open with a prologue and you’re wondering, “How can a prologue help my story?” the short answer is, In Many Ways. And to show you what a good guy I am, here’s a brief list of Good Things Prologues Can Do which I’ve borrowed and amalgamated from different sources:

A prologue can be used to...

1) Introduce essential facts about the past or the future.

2) Spark the reader’s imagination and get her primed to jump into your story. However, if this is really all your prologue does, maybe it would be better suited as Chapter 1.

3) Establish a mood and atmosphere.

4) Provide back-story that can’t be told in the main body of in a better way.

5) Create a hook or pose a question.

6) Introduce an imagined, strange and confusing story world to your reader before launching into your narrative.

7) Establish who’s telling the story and why. (Think Sherlock Holmes.)

8) Introduce a large cast of characters. (This technique is a bit outdated.)

This list is not intended to be comprehensive; certainly, the best prologues are multi-taskers. Just as you should strive for in all your writing, your words should work for you in more ways than one. So, too, the best prologues will weave several elements together at once. You can introduce your protag, give back-story and create a somber mood all with a sentence. Try it.

To balance things a bit, I thought I’d give you some Prologue No-Nos:

1) Resist the urge to tell everything you know. Don’t overwhelm and annoy (read underestimate) your reader by dumping a bunch of information into the first five pages. This will only muddle things.

2) Don’t tip your hand. You dilute your suspense when you give away too much too soon. If you’re going to tell me who the murderer is, you better have a good reason for doing so, and the story you develop better be absorbing and intense.

3) A good prologue has its own sense of drama, but it must be linked to the story. A prologue so far removed in place or time from your main story line will be confusing and misleading to the reader, and it will not serve as a strong opening for your novel.

4) Prologues should not be vague or confusing. They should intrigue, and enlighten, and most of all, make things cooler and clearer.

5) Lastly, a personal peeve, prologues should never be written in the passive voice.

That’s my take on prologues. Use ‘em if you have to, don’t if you don’t, but if you do, make them entertaining and make them work for you.

Either he’s dead or my watch has stopped.

Groucho Marx

Greetings from the Drake Writers’ Group

Marcia Eckstein

On July 29th, Barbara Slavinski, the medical librarian from Drake Center brought three members of the Drake Writer’s Group on a field trip to CWP’s Wednesday Fiction Critique group. Drake’s focus has changed over the years and it is almost exclusively a rehab center for brain injury patients now.

Ms. Slavinski encourages patients and workers to express themselves through the writers’ group. At the end of our session, the Drake group was presented with a copy of Not From Around Here, Are You? for their library.

Drake Writers’ Group meets on Tuesdays and Fridays from 2 to 3 pm in the Drake Medical Library. Writers read their work and the group offers support. Ms. Slavinski said, “We welcome your visit to us.” If you are interested, call Barbara at 418-2684.

We all go: only a few, first class.

Titanic, David R. Slavin

Paying for An Editorial Review

By James Montgomery Jackson

I heard the praise: “Clean writing.” “Great characters and each an interesting individual.” “Fine dry sense of humor.” “Terrific relationship between Seamus and Paddy.”

More importantly, the damning: “I really liked the book once I got into it.” “It really perked up when I got to …” “Great opening and I thought the ending was terrific.” “I wasn’t quite sure about…”

A niggling whisper in my brain said something was not quite right, but no one could tell me exactly what or how to fix it.

After many agent rejections of Bad Policy the whisper became as loud as the Niagara River at the falls. In one sense I believed my writing was better than many, maybe even most, commercial mysteries. In another sense I knew it was a failure. Based on their oblique comments, critique groups and individual readers sensed something, but couldn’t provide me with enough insight so I could tackle the problem. A sage once said the definition of being crazy is to do the same thing over and over and over again and expect a different result. I needed to do something different if my writing was to succeed.

I belong to the Sisters-In-Crime and their Guppy Chapter (for the little fish swimming in the waters: the not-yet-published or lightly-published). From a recently successful author I got a recommendation of a professional to analyze Bad Policy.

Before signing on as a client, I traded a couple of emails with Jennifer Fisher of JSF Editorial to make sure I understood her process and she understood what I thought I needed. The estimated cost was $750. It seemed like a fit, and I sent her a hardcopy of my manuscript.

What did I get for my money?

I got confirmation about both of my presumptions. I can write a good sentence: “You are a very clean stylist and write with a sense of immediacy which is great for a mystery. Typically your sentences are tight and punchy and your word choice is right on target. And I applaud you for your grammatical sensibility…” I had problems: “But as you well know a book needs more than strong writing to hold it together…”

Her approach is to take notes as she reads the manuscript, primarily focusing on problems or questions, but noting good stuff as well. The advantage of these notes is to give you insight into her impressions as a reader, albeit one with a more critical eye than typical. After she completes the book, she summarizes her findings and makes general and specific recommendations. She also gave considerable thought to alternative strategies that would help strengthen my book.

Was it worthwhile?

My first reaction when I read Jennifer’s eight and a half page, single-spaced critique was that I was a hopeless hack who could write a decent sentence, but couldn’t be trusted with anything more than a paragraph. Erica Jong once said, “Advice is what we ask for when we already know the answer but wish we didn’t.” Amen. After a suitable mourning period, I reread the letter and mined its gold. I had sensed Bad Policy had a saggy middle; Jennifer not only confirmed my fears, she showed where I should apply liposuction and radical surgery. She gave me insight into how I could add depth to the manuscript with additional subplot and character development.

She challenged several of my deep-rooted assumptions about Bad Policy, and I realized I needed to hold a wake and wish them a wonderful afterlife. Starting with her ideas I brainstormed others and developed some interesting approaches. The thinking reenergized me, and I became enthusiastic to do the necessary work of a complete rewrite.

After several weeks considering Jennifer’s feedback, we spoke on the telephone for half an hour. I provided her additional insight into my characters and their motivations and then suggested my new proposed opening, additional subplot and what I thought I’d leave on the cutting room floor. We batted ideas back and forth and improved them.

Should you consider paying for a critique?

With self-study and critique group feedback I continued to make incremental improvements, but my writing had essentially reached a plateau. To be successful I needed to reach higher ground, and I needed a guide to show me the way. There are other approaches that could work for you: concentrated writing conferences, school courses, a mentor. Living far into the Upper Peninsula of Michigan woods, none of those was practical for me.

I consider the $750 money well spent. What I learned will not only assist me in improving Bad Policy, it will affect the way I write in the future.

I guess I’d better get to it, eh?

I’m trying to die correctly, but it’s very difficult you know.

Lawrence Durrell

Context Review

Mary Fitz…

I know I’ve talked about Context in the past but I went again this year and was even more impressed that usual in the quality of the Context Writing workshops. Context is a Science Fiction Convention held every year in Columbus, Ohio. Don’t let that spook you, it’s not the sort of Con where you’ll run into chicks in chainmail in the elevator or members of the fighting 501^st in the hotel bar. Context is a small, low-key, non-media oriented Con that focuses on writing and writers. They have a full schedule of the sort of panels you might find at any Con, but they also have a full schedule of mini writing workshops. Although it is a SF Con, most of the writing workshops are geared to anyone writing commercial genre fiction.

This year I did two workshops. One was on Conflict and Plot and was lead by Tim Esaias who is one of the professors from Seaton Hill’s MFA in the popular novel program. The second was called Improv for Writers. This workshop taught us how to use the sort of “story spine” actors and comics use to improve as an outline for longer works of fiction. Ellen Klages, who ran this workshop, is both a published writer and an experienced improv performer. She started the workshop by pairing us up and having us actually do some improv. It’s far harder than it looks. After we had all looked silly doing that, she walked us through the how-to use a - “Once upon a time…And every day…But one day… And because of that… And because of that… And because of that…Until finally…And ever since then…” Story Spine to plot out a story or novel. At first this formula seemed off, but she showed us how work from everyone from Garrison Keller to Charles Dickens follows this format. Using a story spine is a great way for someone who is more pantster than plotter to chart out the flow of their work.

If you are writing commercial genre fiction and you are looking for a nearby, not horribly expensive writing workshop you should look into Context in 2010.

Published,the Few, the Proud

Tom Groh’s story, Little White Bunnies, was published by Badlight Magazine in July. His flash fiction story, Fork, was accepted and will appear in the webzine, The Green Flash, this October.

Conferences, Contests, Workshops, Gatherings

Celebrate Danny Miller and Appalachian Writing

“Voices from the Hills”, a celebration honoring the life and work of Danny Miller, will take place at NKU on September 26^th with, among others, Wendell Berry, Gurney Norman, Crystal Wilkinson and Frank X. Walker.

For details: htt://English.nku.edu/people/dannymiller/voices.php

The Independence Inklings Writer’s Group is open to all writers, of all skill levels and genres. The group is hosted by and meets at the Durr Branch of the Kenton County Public Library in Independence, Kentucky, on the first Sunday of every month at 1 p.m. Details www.dawnrinken.com or drinken@therinkens.com.

SinC Into Great Writing! Sisters in Crime will sponsor a writing workshop October 14, 2009 at the Hyatt Regency in Indianapolis, IN, $50 for SinC members, $150 for nonmembers. Email Beth Wasson sistersincrime@juno.com. Deadline: September 22, 2009.

Backspace Writers Conference, Nov. 5 & 6^th, 2009 and May 2010 in NYC with agent-author day and opportunity to be critiqued by minimum of 12 agents. Go to www.backspacewritersconference.com

Boucheron 2009, World Mystery Convention, Oct 15-18. Event run by fans, for fans. www.Boucheron2009.com

www.sleuthfest.com Feb. 26-28,2010 in Deerfield Beach, Fla. Sponsored by the Florida Mystery Writers of America. Short story contest.

www.Writersinparadise.eckerd.edu Conference Jan. 16 – 24, 2010, St. Petersburg, Fl. With Dennis Lehane, Laura Lippman, Anita Shreve, and others.

Ether Tools

Links, Blogs, and Helpful Websites for Writers

Brainyquote.com – fun; ssa.gov/OACT/babynames – trying to name a character?; ***urbandictionary.com – modern;

Nanowrimo.org – National Novel Writing Month (November)

Book-in-a-week.com – Their motto: BIC HOK TAM. Butt in chair, hands on keyboard, typing away madly;

thestorystarter.com – need a kick start

Online Writing Groups and Communities

absolutewrite.com – navigate at your own risk.

ed2010.com - for learning about the magazine side of publishing thwritingbridge.com – Application process. If approved, you’re on probation and must keep up with the required critiques/submissions

agentquery.com – Indispensible, free, and all you need

duotrope.com – handy for finding markets for short stories; writersdigest.com, the magazine on-line.

Paid subscription to writersmarket.com or publishersmarketplace.com.

agentquery.com is free and has all you need; jakonrath.blogspot.com – Newbie’s Guide To Publishing

cbaybooks.blogspot.com –good glossary

Agent sites: etreidliterary.blogspot.com and nathanbransford.blogspot.com

***bookendsliteraryagency.blogspot.com –Jessica Faust of Bookends Literary Agency

pubrants.blogspot.com –agent Kristen Nelson, chatty, useful ***rejectionqueen.blogspot.com – if you want to feel better about your own rejections

anotherrealm.com/prededitors - Preditors & Editors

literarylawguide.com/resources.htm – the go-to source for copyrights

QueryTracker.net – If you plan to send out lots of queries

sfwa.org/beware – Originating from the sci-fi crowd, watchdog site for all

armchairinterviews.com; eighteenquestions.com; noveljourneys.blogspot.com; coolstuff4writers.com – Self-explanatory

writesideout.com –Custom book covers, t-shirts, etc.

CWP Members blogs & websites:

www.joedriscoll.org
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/CWP_Fiction/?yguid=177017700

Mary Fitzpatrick, Prez CWP, http://maryfitz.typepad.com/my_weblog

Bob Lewis, fiction writer, http://iaintsorry.blogspot.com

Amy Purcell, fiction, www.amypurcell.com/blog

Chris Specht www.cspecht.com

Madeline Izzo - www.pittsburghwritersproject.org

www.icecharades.blogspot.com

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The Accidental Word

(overheard in CWP Fiction Writers Crit Group – Weds night)

“This writers’ group is different than ours,” she said, her face a sort of apology. “Participants read their work out loud. Then we all say how wonderful it is.”

“We use tough love here,” he answered, with a mean grin.

Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave

Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind,

Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave.

I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned.

Dirge Without Music, Edna St. Vincent Millay

Context - Saturday

2009-08-30T00:21:04-04:00

Srill having fun. I'm up way to late typing this. I miss the science programing, but still sat in on some good panels. Weird World of Science with Rob Pyatt was fun as always, even if we had seem much of the same stuff at InConjunction. Improve for writers was good. Improv is WAY harder than it looks, and the workshop gave me some writing insights that I think will be useful. Tim Esaias' Conflict & Plot workshop was good too. Ive been to three of his workshops now, and have really like them all. I wish I had the money and lives close enough to Seaton Hill to take one of his college classes.

Context - Friday

2009-08-28T23:59:00-04:00

Having fun at Context. Good filking tonight. The camera batteries died before I could get a shot of the women doing ASL translation of Tom Smith's concert. Tom is always fun but some time she stole the show. Who knew there was an ASL word for cylon ?

Singularity's Ring - Paul Melko

2009-08-27T11:02:00-04:00

Singularity's Ring is the story of Apollo Papadopulo. Apollo is training to become the captain of the soon to be completed starship Consensus. This is a future where the world is oddly changed from what we know today. The story takes place twenty years after the Exodus, when the vast majority of humans, who lived interfaced with an souped up version of the world wide web know as the Community, vanished. The Community left behind a globe circling space station known as the Ring, and several half finished interstellar space ships. No one knows for sure what happened to them. Were they all vaporized by some accident? Did they create a singularity and ascend to some higher level of being?

The humans who were left after the Exodus rejected living in an all inclusive technological link, but they wanted some of the enhanced data gathering, and problem solving, and intelligence the link provided. To get this they use bioengineering to alter humanity, so that each "person" is a pod made up of more then one individual. Pods use a combination of pheromones, and direct chemical messages passed when they touch special pads on their hands, to think and act as one entity.

Apollo is a quint, a pod of five individuals- Storm. Meda, Quant, Manuel, Moria. Storm is male, he is strong and athletic, Moria is female, she is brilliant, Meda is also female, she is a natural communicator and negotiator, Quant is also female, she lives and breathes math, and Manuel is male, he is dexterous. Each one is a separate human being with their own thoughts and motivations, but they are also part of a whole that is greater than the sum of their parts.

While on a cold weather survival test in the Rockies, that is part of the screening process for the Starship Captain's program, Apollo and several of the other pods are caught in an avalanche. Apollo only survived because of quick thinking on Storm's part, and the possible intervention of a talking Grizzly Bear. Storm's actions also save most of the members of the second pod. Instead of being reward for this Apollo is sent home to the farm where they were raised for a period of enforced rest. When the individual members of the pod compare notes, and start to investigate the accident things don't add up. It looks like the avalanche was deliberately set up to kill or break-up one or more of the pots in the captain's program. No one believes Storm's account of meeting bears who have pod like pheromones and touch pads

Shortly after this Apollo meets Malcom Leto the sole surviving member of the Community. He had been attached to medical equipment that was repairing brain damage when the Singularity happened, and so was left behind. Leto romances and seduces Meda. He convinces her to to prove her love by letting him install a computer port in her head. He has ulterior motives and Meda escapes before he can use her to start to build a new Community.

Various other things happen and Apollo is sent for a few months training on the space station where the starships are being built. This should be their dream come true, but it turns into a disaster. The pod begins to suspect that someone is trying to kill them. The more they learn the more they realize that many things about their life are not what they thought they were. Most pods are made up of two or three individuals. Quints like Apollo are rare and experimental. Apollo may be more experimental than the law allows. Storm may be able to talk to modified animals. Manuel's body has been modified for zero gravity, his feet can also be used as hands, Quint's brain seems to have been changed so she can see and feel paths needed to fly a ship through space. She is also autistic, if she had not been raised in the circle of her pod she would not be able to function on her own. Moria and Meda also have aspects of their personalities that make they unusual.

Apollo is surrounded by questions. Was the accident in the Rockies planned to set things in motion so they would meet Leto? Does someone wants a pod with the ability to use Community technology so they can access the abandon Ring? Who is tinkering with bear genes to create pods of intelligent Grizzlies and why?

Singularity's Ring is a great read. The universe of the book is fresh and intriguing. The plot has enough twists and turns to keep even the most jaded reader guessing what is going to happen next. The story is told in alternating chapters by the five members of the pod that makes up Apollo Papadopulos so the reader gets to know each one's hopes and fears from the inside. This lets the reader get a feel for what it would be like to be an individual, who is also one part of another person.

I have met Paul Melko at various Local SF Cons. I think he lives in central Ohio someplace. I took a workshop on good beginnings that he did with Tobias Buckell at Context one year. Singularity's Ring is the first work of his that I've read. It is Melko's first novel, although he has published numerous pieces of short fiction. I'm really looking forward to seeing what he does next.

Yummy

2009-08-21T08:26:44-04:00

Having watermelon fresh from my garden for breakfast. It almost makes the horrid heat of summer worthwhile Kzin's not so sure.